Tuesday, February 9, 2010
The person I look up to
One of the people I look up to would be Walter Payton. Walter was a great football player as that is shown by the many records he holds. He was a good football player because of his strength, agility, and determination. The traits also helped him be great off the field too. Walter founded foundations and charities such as the WCPF and the Walter Payton cancer fund. Walter has many records in the NFL from his astonishing football career. Walter was a great football player in college when he went to Jackson State University. He was a great football player and could have gotten a scholarship to a big southeastern college but being that he was an African-American, they wouldn’t offer him a scholarship. Later in time his amazing college career would have him inducted into the college football hall of fame and also the black college football hall of fame. Walter was drafted #4 pick overall in the 1975 NFL Draft by the Chicago Bears. In his first season in the NFL, he did not have very many rushing yards or touchdowns, but determined to do better Walter rushed for over 1,000 yards in the 1976 season with also 17 touchdowns. As the years went by, he kept on improving his football game to the point of him breaking many NFL records. Walter played with the bears his whole career, until his 1987 retirement. His determination throughout his career caused him to win awards like playing in the pro bowl and being inducted into the hall of fame. After his career his charities and foundations still help everyone today even after his death in 1999. I look up to Walter Payton because he is a good role model on the field and off, he inspires me through his football ability and his charities and foundations that he has made.
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This is really good. towards the end though, you say he played with the bears. Even though you said Chicago Bears earlier and I know what you mean,some people might not so say Chicago Bears or just Bears and make sure to capitalize. And towards the beginning you say he started the WCPF I don't know what the stands for so I'm guessing that not many people do, so say the whole thing and then in paranthesis put WCPF, just a thought. Nice job, He was a good person to pick as a role model.
ReplyDeleteI liked all of the facts about him, and how you added many of his records. How old is Walter and when was he born? If this were my paper I would add how he is all of those things you look up to him for.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the first paragraph because it told us a little bit about him and what the essay was going to be about,and made me want to keep reading. I agree with Jordan that you should explain more of the football stuff, because some people (like me) don't know what all those things mean. If this was my essay I would relate him to you more instead of kind of just doing a report on him.
ReplyDeleteI liked reading this, but there wasn't enough about why you were inspired by Walter. It seems more like a mini biography to me.
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